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mandalore river
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Joined: July 22, 2010
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From: port angeles, washington, earth, sol, milkyway
|  Posted: 2010-08-16 10:09
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On 2010-08-12 10:34, Gejaheline wrote:
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On 2010-08-11 18:02, Coeus wrote:
Extremely doubtful. As I said in f chat last night, I ran into numerous problems of "I would never do this." "I wanna be the hero!" "I wanna have splodey boom awesomes!" "You killt me! QQ!" and other things that really sidetracked the story and derailed the characters.
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Having written fiction for games using players and events that occured in-game, I can attest to the extreme difficulty due to things like this.
Players tend not to act in-character, which means that trying to then write a coherent story with the characters justifying their actions is just a bit challenging.
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yeah thats probaly true some people could get a little ticked off if you killed them
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Vice Admiral Onassi
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Joined: March 20, 2010
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From: Bridge of the Hot Needle of Inquiry
| Posted: 2010-08-16 11:01
Whenever you write your next fic maybe you can do it about me.. Admiral KillStuff of the TNFS CSS SpamMobile.  Maybe even a comedy fic
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Marius Falix
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Joined: July 05, 2010
Posts: 268
From: Luyten
| Posted: 2010-08-16 14:05
Epic. gotta say it was best start- middle.
wasnt a fan of the end so much. since when was he engaged?
maybe i missed that.
and a few random inconsistancies, but nothing major
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Coeus
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Joined: March 22, 2006
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From: Philly
| Posted: 2010-08-16 17:07
I tried to address as many of them during the re-write as I possibly could - but the Fiance bit is addressed at the end of Chapter 2 (this is why I told you repeatedly to read it from the website  There is an insane amount of additions, corrections, modifications, and explainations that went into it during the rewrite that aren't worth fixing in the original posts).
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Linna Yamazaka {Vice Admiral}
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Joined: May 03, 2003
Posts: 415
From: killer
| Posted: 2010-08-17 01:08
*Peeks in and reads a little bit but mostly looks for new stuff that includes her and frowns seeing none. " Hey there I'm back for the moment but might be off and on here and there, nice to see the story is elvoving still " Hugs and then disappairs once more.*
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Coeus
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From: Philly
| Posted: 2010-08-17 17:27
Back in your corner, woman! *whip crack*
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Linna Yamazaka {Vice Admiral}
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From: killer
| Posted: 2010-08-18 21:39
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On 2010-08-17 17:27, Coeus wrote:
Back in your corner, woman! *whip crack*
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No no I do not want too! !
*Grabs the whip and snaps Coeus with it.*
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Fatal Rocko Willis
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Joined: March 01, 2003
Posts: 1336
From: Kentucky
| Posted: 2010-08-22 09:31
I'd watch that Linna, I heard he likes whips...
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Fatal Rocko Willis
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From: Kentucky
| Posted: 2010-08-22 09:33
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On 2010-08-16 17:07, Coeus wrote:
I tried to address as many of them during the re-write as I possibly could - but the Fiance bit is addressed at the end of Chapter 2 (this is why I told you repeatedly to read it from the website There is an insane amount of additions, corrections, modifications, and explainations that went into it during the rewrite that aren't worth fixing in the original posts).
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I saw this bold part first and thought OMG some girl has the fortitude to marry Coeus? Then I saw you were talking about your story...
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Coeus
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From: Philly
| Posted: 2010-08-22 17:53
Hahaha, thanks buddy =P
I usually leave their asses in the dust when that kinda talk comes knocking around again 
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